Not all who wander

my attempts at triolet, as challenged on dVerse.

Gandalf

Gandalf was quite correct when he said it,

“Not all who wander are lost” is wisdom.

Some who are lost, though, wander not.

 

Wandering , while not lost, is fraught

with dangers, more than you thought.

Bigger than a trap, perhaps your doom!

 

Gandalf was quite correct when he said it,

“Not all who wander are lost” is freedom.

 

Wolves

The wolves come in the moonlight.

They are seeking food and water.

The dogs barking an unwelcome fit.

 

The wolves and the cows have it

an uneasy truce every day and night.

They fight not, peace no slaughter.

 

The wolves come in the moonlight.

They are seeking the moon’s laughter.

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20 Comments

  1. zongrik said,

    March 9, 2012 at 12:11 am

    i like the truce between the wolves and the cows

    senryu of constructed new-natures

  2. Mary said,

    March 9, 2012 at 12:28 am

    I agree that all who wander arwe lost. Wandering definitely can be an expression of freedom. Not everyone takes that freedom. Nice triolet.

    Here is mine:

    http://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2012/03/lost-city.html

    • shanyns said,

      March 9, 2012 at 12:35 am

      Mary – thank you for coming by, your triolet is amazing too! I hope that anyone reading the comments goes to read it! Glad you enjoyed your read here.

  3. brian miller said,

    March 9, 2012 at 12:31 am

    nice…love the LOTR reference and a nice dance to your words in that first…i also like your variation in the last line of the second…the moons laughter…very cool…

    • shanyns said,

      March 9, 2012 at 12:34 am

      Brian – thanks! 🙂 Nice and cool, that’s awesome! So glad you enjoyed, and it is, as usual, great to see you!

  4. hedgewitch said,

    March 9, 2012 at 1:10 am

    First–I like what you’ve done here, both your poems are thought provoking and have original and arresting images. Second–I’m so glad I’ve found you in your alter ego of non-Mystic Mom–thanks so much for all your comments at my place which have never til now been returned as I couldn’t track you back through blogger.(brian let me in on the secret. He knows everybody. ;_) )

    • shanyns said,

      March 9, 2012 at 1:48 am

      Thanks for coming by, and kudos for solving the mystery (Brian does rock, doesn’t he?) I appreciate your efforts in finding me. I will put a button on Mystic Mom to help others find their way…! 🙂 And I appreciate your comment – so encouraging.

  5. Claudia said,

    March 9, 2012 at 5:29 am

    nice..so you went for two…smiles… i like them both but my fav was the first one because i’m just a huge lord of the ring fan…nicely done..

    • shanyns said,

      March 9, 2012 at 3:04 pm

      Claudia, I’m a huge LOTR fan too! 🙂 And that is one of my favorite lines. So glad you enjoyed your read, great to see you stop by.

  6. March 9, 2012 at 8:21 am

    Thought these were both admirable. Yes wandering free is a goal for many like me. Wandering aimlessly isn’t even bad as long as one can consider it an adventure and not senility.

    Wolves are greatly symbolic and work on so many levels. So much like us they spawned our best friends, the most mutated of all animals..the domesticated dog.

    Well done.

    • shanyns said,

      March 9, 2012 at 3:03 pm

      Gay – thank you! It is those who are lost and are not wandering that worry me, how are they going to find their way if they don’t move? Yes wolves have done a lot for us, our dogs most of all!

      Great that you stopped by, thanks for the comment.

  7. Tony said,

    March 9, 2012 at 9:35 am

    “Not all who wander are lost.”

    Great use of a great line.

  8. Chazinator said,

    March 9, 2012 at 10:34 pm

    I like the way you vary the ending in the second triolet. I think it’s amazing how Tolkien opens up the desire to write poetry. These two poems are obviously in that spirit.

    • shanyns said,

      March 10, 2012 at 2:34 am

      Chaz – thank you! Tolkien does inspire me 🙂 Thanks for coming by and I appreciate your comment.

  9. seingraham said,

    March 10, 2012 at 1:19 am

    Interesting take on the form in both poems … will be watching for your work more carefully now …

    http://thepoet-tree-house.blogspot.com/2012/03/grief-leaves-heart.html

    • shanyns said,

      March 10, 2012 at 2:35 am

      Thank you for coming by, and I look forward to seeing you here again. Glad you found them interesting.

  10. ManicDdaily said,

    March 10, 2012 at 3:21 pm

    Both poems are great efforts–but I have a secret sympathy for cows! (And wolves.)

    K.

    • shanyns said,

      March 11, 2012 at 3:02 am

      🙂 I do too! I love my cows and respect the wolves.


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