River Run

That song plays on the radio.

He a river, she a highway.

Often crossing paths, they never meet.

Each one is more bitter than sweet.

He made to drive, she to flow – joining to seek.

For With Real Toads, dVerse and Magpie Tales…all in one.

Because music is a huge deal in our lives, I had to choose one song for dVerse, and you can find it here.

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51 Comments

  1. May 7, 2012 at 1:15 am

    Very lovely flow…I do like He a river, and she a highway ~

    Happy day to you ~

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 1:35 am

      Thank you very much! Trying a new form is tricky but the photo and the song it brought to mind just made it all come together. So glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for coming by.

      • May 7, 2012 at 1:43 am

        As to the poetry form though, I think it might need reworking as it calls for a 4 line with the rhyme scheme of aaba with the 4th line with b rhyme on 8th syllable. And we need to post at least 2 stanzas…I know it is very challenging ~ I will be posting mine up for OLN ~

  2. markwindham said,

    May 7, 2012 at 1:23 am

    very good, especially like ‘each one more bitter than sweet.’

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 1:36 am

      Thank you very much Mark, always a pleasure to see you stop by. Glad you enjoyed the poem, and I liked how that line worked too! 🙂

  3. Marian said,

    May 7, 2012 at 1:36 am

    sweet! i was actually thinking of Fred Eaglesmith’s “Wilder Than Her” as i read this, check that one out, too

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 2:10 am

      You like Fred Eaglesmith? That’s awesome! He is so good…thanks for coming by!

      • Marian said,

        May 9, 2012 at 4:04 pm

        oooooh one of my most special favorites 🙂

      • shanyns said,

        May 10, 2012 at 2:26 am

        Oh cool…thanks! 🙂

  4. hedgewitch said,

    May 7, 2012 at 1:59 am

    As pretty as the picture, Shanyn.

  5. Mary said,

    May 7, 2012 at 2:04 am

    I loved the way you expressed this and found your last line very thought-provoking and thoughtful!

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 2:11 am

      Thank you so much…that last line took some work but I’m so pleased you liked how it worked.

  6. brian miller said,

    May 7, 2012 at 2:13 am

    really good…he a river, she a highway always close but…ugh that but hurts a bit…the more bitter than sweet line too is really good…

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 2:19 am

      It does hurt, doesn’t it? But sometimes that’s how life flows…glad you enjoyed the read. Great to see you here Brian!

  7. May 7, 2012 at 2:16 am

    I like this take on the dVerse prompt. Well done! 🙂

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 2:20 am

      Thank you so much for coming by and I”m so pleased you enjoyed my take on the prompt.

  8. May 7, 2012 at 2:47 am

    You have managed to pour an immense amount of longing into this. I love it!!!

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 4:05 am

      Zoe – thank you! So great to see you and I’m so pleased that you enjoyed the read.

  9. May 7, 2012 at 2:49 am

    I love this. Have written about both, but never together. So ubber kool and well written. I will revisit this piece. Very glad I stopped by to read. Very great skill. Excellente!

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 4:06 am

      So glad you stopped by, and I’m very pleased that you enjoyed the poem. Will be stopping by your blog.

  10. May 7, 2012 at 4:51 am

    You rocked that combo, Shanyns!! I was about to try for Mag and Real Toads together but I bailed! Great writing!

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 4:54 am

      Hannah – thank you so much! 🙂 I have to try your form one day! So glad you enjoyed the read.

  11. margaretbednar said,

    May 7, 2012 at 5:23 am

    Maybe the Highway and River don’t “blend” but you did quite well with both prompts. I hadn’t heard the song before. I do love her voice and the photos are stunning. 🙂

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 5:06 pm

      Margaret – I love that song, it moves my heart in ways I don’t really understand. So glad you enjoyed the poem, and I’m happy you discovered a new song to enjoy too!

  12. Karen S. said,

    May 7, 2012 at 5:43 am

    This is so lovely! I have to check this out (and here such a lovely song)…it seems like one I’ve heard before, and yet brand new at the same time….very nicely done, indeed!

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 5:06 pm

      Karen – so glad you came by, and am really pleased you enjoyed both the poem and the song. Great to see you here!

  13. poemsofhateandhope said,

    May 7, 2012 at 7:29 am

    The river and the highway – never meeting, but almost like they are looking for one another , sometimes passing close by each other- what a rich metaphor you have created here! Very much enjoyed it

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 5:12 pm

      Thank you so much for coming b, and I really enjoyed your comment. Great to see you here!

  14. May 7, 2012 at 9:20 am

    This is a very different take on the prompt. Loved it!

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 5:07 pm

      🙂 So glad you love it! So happy to see you here!

  15. May 7, 2012 at 9:32 am

    What a beautiful vision!

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 5:07 pm

      Mimi – thanks for coming by, and I’m so glad you enjoyed the read.

  16. Teresa said,

    May 7, 2012 at 2:13 pm

    What a beautiful yet sad poem.

  17. May 7, 2012 at 2:38 pm

    I love the poem as a response to the picture. However, the rhyme scheme is not entirely accurate for the florette form. Of course, any form is merely the starting point for writing and if the poem goes in another direction, so be it.

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 5:09 pm

      Kerry – I was concentrating so hard on the form, I totally got caught up in the poem and the form went a little astray! 🙂 Glad you liked where it went though, it was more river than highway on this one!

  18. Sue Anderson said,

    May 7, 2012 at 4:19 pm

    I agree with Kerry. Let the form flow where it will.
    And I like the song that inspired this.

    =)

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 5:11 pm

      Sue – thank you! I did let it go where it wanted, even though I tried to keep some of the form for the challenge, that extra line just needed to be there!

  19. Laurie Kolp said,

    May 7, 2012 at 5:44 pm

    This is so beautiful. I like the song, too (I also saw Pam live, hehe).

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 5:59 pm

      Aww you saw so many! I guess I did too when I think of it! 🙂 So glad you enjoyed the poem. I do so love her songs, that one especially!

  20. claudia said,

    May 7, 2012 at 6:00 pm

    she a river..he a highway…and opposites def. attract but can’t necessarily live with each other… nice…i like..leaves me with a sad feeling though..

    • shanyns said,

      May 7, 2012 at 6:17 pm

      This song, and the poem it inspired, reminds me of a time when I was the river and he was a highway and we never did get to really be together..it is a sad feeling, and I think the poem works if you leave with a bit of that. Thanks for coming by and leaving your comment!

  21. Tess Kincaid said,

    May 7, 2012 at 6:30 pm

    You describe incompatibility so well here…

    • shanyns said,

      May 9, 2012 at 2:42 am

      Thank you Tess…so glad you enjoyed it and it is always nice when you stop by.

  22. Jj Rodriguez said,

    May 9, 2012 at 1:13 am

    awesome! love it!

    JJRod’z

  23. Helen said,

    May 10, 2012 at 3:49 pm

    Really nice … it’s hard to combine prompts, you did it well!

  24. yoga-adan said,

    May 25, 2012 at 1:22 pm

    the verse and image have met, nice pairing! thanks shanyns

    now for he & she to meet greet and seek – may they find interesting paths 😉

    • shanyns said,

      May 25, 2012 at 3:14 pm

      Adan – thanks for coming by. I’am glad you enjoyed the poem.


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