Like that

I can’t tell how it feels

Your nerves fire sssst 

Mine tingle and  snap

~

can tell you it is like…

that first sip of coffee.

too hot to swallow fast

smelling rich of memory

~

I can’t tell how it feels

Your presence draws

Mine pushes too hard.

~

can tell you it is like…

that first blossom in spring

the one waiting to open

the one you smell in sleep

~

can’t tell you how it feels.

Your coolness like a shadow

My seeking the side of sun.

~

can tell you it is like…

knowing the song in two bars

every word, in your voice

singing my missing parts.

~

I can’t tell you how it feels.

Your voice close as breath.

My heart pounding hard.

~

I can tell you it is like…

Finding the missing  part

inside a long packed box

treasure packed too long.

~

I can’t tell you how it feels.

You right there to touch.

Me, afraid and yet brave.

~

I can tell you it is like…

Like that, that one thing.

that makes it all make sense

that makes it worthwhile.

~

Like that. Always like that.

 

Claudia has us sharing emotions, without naming the emotion, for MEETING AT THE BAR for dVerse tonight. Mine has a mix of emotions, the ones you would find after being away from a loved one for a bit too long, with a bit too much stress, worry and a lot of faith guiding the way. Enjoy the other poets, and remember leave love!

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11 Comments

  1. kkkkaty said,

    April 4, 2014 at 12:09 am

    ..and you didn’t mention any of those emotions, but they came through loud and clear..nicely written, Shanyn.

  2. April 4, 2014 at 12:11 am

    Lovely and the repetition of the first line makes it sing…but my favourite is
    I can tell you it is like…

    knowing the song in two bars

    every word, in your voice

    singing my missing parts.

    Beautiful!

  3. Grace said,

    April 4, 2014 at 12:51 am

    Deep emotional responses ~ Some words fail to describe how we really feel about our loved ones ~

  4. claudia said,

    April 4, 2014 at 4:09 am

    I can tell you it is like…

    knowing the song in two bars

    every word, in your voice

    singing my missing parts…. my fav… ha.. i can FEEL that…smiles

  5. MarinaSofia said,

    April 4, 2014 at 7:37 am

    Nice comparisons there.. the treasure packed too long especially moved me.

  6. kamana said,

    April 4, 2014 at 8:25 am

    very evocative

  7. brian miller said,

    April 4, 2014 at 1:39 pm

    ha i like this…trying to find a way to say it but…i like the comparison to the first day of spring…that first bud…the tingle and zap…..col comparisons throughout…

  8. Barry Dawson said,

    April 4, 2014 at 5:31 pm

    This is amazing. Just amazing. Held my breath and bit my lip as I read along. My favorite lines:

    “I can tell you it is like…
    knowing the song in two bars
    every word, in your voice
    singing my missing parts.”

    Wonderful. Thanks for sharing this.

  9. April 4, 2014 at 6:28 pm

    The way we say it.. really good use of metaphors with most feelings included.

  10. April 9, 2014 at 12:32 am

    The way you use repetition is so good in this one, Shanyn, building up to the climax. Enjoyed much.


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