Breaking the American Sentence

Breaking the American Sentence into a Canadian form. eh!

Broken from haiku, the American Sentence was born into poetry. Lovely.

A true bird of snow, no feeble fleeing snow bird, she waits. Silent. Still. Deadly.

Invisible against a snow sky, often missed against the endless blue. Sacred?

Seeing them is a gift we seek. A gift we treasure. Something dear. Snowy!

How many miss the magic? What other treasures pass by unseen? Mystified.

Look around, see what you can see. Owl. Deer. Fox. Joy. Blessings to seek and find. Go! 

Snowy Owl – she flies!

The challenge at dVerse is to break and enter – take a form and make it your own. I broke the American Sentence a wee bit by adding a Canadian ending word. A question. A comment. A statement. Sarcasm. Hope. Something.

Great to be back at the Pub. Stop by the link below, see the magic other poets have woven.

http://dversepoets.com/2015/01/22/meetingthebar-breaking-entering/

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26 Comments

  1. January 24, 2015 at 5:02 am

    Wow – you did make it your own and I think Canadian – why not a Canadian or a British sentence. Wot! I like the italicized after/word. Very cool! It’s all about the birds, ’bout the birds today!

    • shanyns said,

      January 25, 2015 at 2:53 am

      🙂 Thanks Gay! I kept thinking how we always seem to add a bit of an aside to what is said, and it seemed to fit the form. Glad you enjoyed!

  2. January 24, 2015 at 7:12 am

    This is fun. I like how the added word almost question the rest of the sentence.. A sort of counterweight to the rest.

    • shanyns said,

      January 25, 2015 at 2:54 am

      Yes. Exactly! Glad you came by and enjoyed 🙂

  3. claudia said,

    January 24, 2015 at 7:53 am

    oh wow – i have never seen a snow owl with my own eyes and so would love to – not sure if we even have them over here… but yeah… important to have those open eyes to be able to see the things around us

    • shanyns said,

      January 25, 2015 at 2:54 am

      Come visit! They are around all the time in the winter. So close. A real treat and blessing to enjoy them. Something to seek out for sure. Thanks for coming over.

  4. Tony Maude said,

    January 24, 2015 at 9:55 am

    It’s so important to keep our eyes open – and not just because we’re writers.

    You’re Canadian sentences have me thinking of a possible Irish equivalent, where each complete sentence has the word but added as a postscript … smiles.

    • shanyns said,

      January 25, 2015 at 2:56 am

      ooooh I like the Irish twist! 🙂 Very cool. We should do a Poetics with that sometime! I love being a writer and photographer, I get to capture so much in different forms.

  5. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) said,

    January 24, 2015 at 1:07 pm

    Sentences that are not sentences, being broken by full stops – what a fun idea! And I see you have broken the 17-syllable rule too. The Canadian endings give a lovely, enlivening effect.

    • shanyns said,

      January 25, 2015 at 2:56 am

      Thank you. It was fun, and I’m glad you came by.

  6. Joseph Hesch said,

    January 24, 2015 at 1:37 pm

    Well done, Shanyn! The images on their own are brilliant, but the addition of the Canadian finale takes them to an even greater personal/universal level.

  7. Brian Miller said,

    January 24, 2015 at 3:27 pm

    a gift indeed…what a beautiful capture of the snow owl…
    canadien for eh? ha. that gave a me a chuckle…

    • shanyns said,

      January 25, 2015 at 2:57 am

      Glad you enjoyed it Brian. I snuck in under the wire for the linky and I’m sure glad I did!

  8. ManicDdaily said,

    January 24, 2015 at 8:32 pm

    Very clever. A chuckle for me too, Shanyn. k.

  9. Bryan Ens said,

    January 25, 2015 at 5:19 am

    Ha! We both used “Eh!” in our poetry. How can you tell we’re fellow cannucks? 🙂

  10. Grace said,

    January 25, 2015 at 12:32 pm

    How clever and thanks for reminding us of the beauty in the everyday nature ~

    Love it, smiles 🙂 Hope you are well Shanyns ~

    • shanyns said,

      January 25, 2015 at 6:27 pm

      Thanks, so glad you loved it and we are good. Hope you are good too Grace!

  11. MarinaSofia said,

    January 26, 2015 at 2:10 pm

    So the Canadians are a bit like the Brits in that respect… Lovely to see you back, we’ve missed you.

    • shanyns said,

      January 26, 2015 at 2:19 pm

      Thanks! I missed you too. Glad you enjoyed them!

  12. January 27, 2015 at 2:31 am

    Oh I love this, full of snow and wild beasties…only in Canada, eh??Love it, Shanyn!!!!

  13. lynn__ said,

    January 31, 2015 at 11:26 pm

    An amazing creature…and I like your Canadian form! Good to read your poetry again, Shanyn 🙂


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